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3.10 Don't force readers to hold a lot of preliminary
information in their head before giving them the main
information
S1 imposes a lot of effort on the reader.

S1. Considering that peach skin is particularly rich in antioxidants (Figs. 1A, 1B, 2A, 2B),
positively reacts to UV-B radiation at the end of postharvest by increasing antioxidant

activity (Fig. 3A), and, differently from flesh, is directly exposed to UV-B radiation under
natural conditions, the study of free radical generation was performed specifi cally on this
tissue.

S2 resolves the problem by splitting the sentence into three. This means that the
reader can absorb the information in manageable chunks, i.e. you feed the reader
small pieces of information at a time. This enables readers to progress forwards
without having to re-read anything.

S2. Peach skin is particularly rich in antioxidants (Figs. 1A, 1B, 2A, 2B) and reacts posi-
tively to UV-B radiation at the end of postharvest by increasing antioxidant activity

(Fig. 3A). Unlike the flesh, the skin is directly exposed to UV-B radiation under natural
conditions. Consequently, the study of free radical generation was performed on peach
skin.
For more on splitting up sentences see Chapter 4 .