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The techniques used for dealing with and can also be used for sentences containing
words and phrases that have a similar meaning to and , such as in addition, further-
more , and moreover .

original version (ov) revised version (rv)
The treatments are very often expensive The treatments are very often expensive and
and technically difficult, moreover their technically diffi cult. Moreover, their

effectiveness very much depends on … effectiveness very much depends on …

4.9 Be careful how you use link words

whereas, on the other hand, although, however

You cannot always break up a long sentence that contains a link by beginning a new
sentence using that link word. This is because not all link words can be used at the
beginning of a sentence. For example, when whereas is used to compare two fi nd-
ings in one long sentence, it should be replaced with on the other hand when the
sentence is split into two.

original version (ov) revised version (rv)
The levels of cadmium in Site C were The levels of cadmium in Site C were comparable
comparable to the levels found in to the levels found in Sites A and B in the previous
Sites A and B in the previous years, years. On the other hand , the levels for copper
whereas / on the other hand the were much lower in Site C with respect to the
levels for copper were much lower values found in the previous sampling campaigns
in Site C with respect to in 2008 and 2010.
the values found in the previous
sampling campaigns in 2008 and 2010.