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English PT3 Part 2 – Theme: Environment

Introduction
• Improvements needed in Sunnyvale Park, PJ

Body
• Only one access road – flooded during heavy downpour
• Problem highlighted in newspaper – require an alternative road
• Lack of public transport – nearest bus stop – two kilometres away – inconvenient,
especially for senior citizens – extending bus route
• No telephone lines – own mobile phones – feeble excuse given by telephone company
– no Internet connection
• Traffic congestion caused by night market – require dedicated space for traders

Conclusion
• Hope town council will take action to remedy the problems immediately

Model Answer

IMPROVEMENTS NEEDED IN SUNNYVALE PARK, PETALING JAYA

The residents of Sunnyvale Park would like to highlight a few areas that require
improvement and upgrading in the neighbourhood and victiny.

The first problem concerns the access road to Sunnyvale Park. At present, there
is only one main road servicing six residential areas, including Sunnyvale Park. When
it rains heavily, the road gets flooded, thus blocking off the only means of access for
residents. The problem has been highlighted in the newspaper many times, but nothing
has been done to solve the problem. The residents want another road to be built as
an alternative.
The second problem is the lack of public transportation servicing Sunnyvale
Park. The nearest bus stop is located some two kilometres from the entrance to our
neighbourhood. Not all residents have private vehicles and it is inconvenient and taxing
for residents, especially senior citizens, to walk that far. We would like the authorities
to consider extending the bus route to cover our area.

The residents have also been without telephone lines since we moved in six
months ago. When we contacted the service provider, we were told that there was no
urgency to install telephone lines as most people had their own mobile phones. We
feel that this is a feeble excuse. It has caused a lot of inconvenience to those who
cannot afford mobile phones.

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