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English PT3 Part 2 – Theme: Environment

Model
128 A Disappointing Visit to a Beach

Model Question Descriptive/Narrative

You and your family recently visited a popular beach in Penang but were disappointed
with the condition the beach was in. In about 120 words, write an essay describing
the condition at the beach and the problems you encountered.

• Illegal business operators – rude and aggressive – competing for business
• Cordoned off prime areas of beach – jet-skis, beach buggies and horse-riding
• Beach buggies racing along beach – people unable to relax
• Horse riding activities – horses’ excrement left behind
• Jet-skiers – dangerously close to swimmers

Write your essay.

Introduction
• Family disappointed with outing at popular beach in Penang
Body
• Illegal business operators – rude and aggressive – competing for business
• Cordoned off prime areas of beach – jet-skis, beach buggies and horse-riding
• Beach buggies racing along beach – people unable to relax
• Horse riding activities – horses’ excrement left behind
• Jet-skiers – dangerously close to swimmers
Conclusion
• Family cut short outing – left early
• Will not be coming back unless peace is restored

Model Answer

My family and I were extremely disappointed when we visited a popular beach
in Penang last weekend.
We had hoped to have a pleasant picnic by the beach but we were not prepared to
be rudely interrupted by the illegal business operators along the beach. The operators
of these businesses were rude and aggressive in competing for customers. They

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